IELTS Essay on employers judging employees on their attire

IELTS Essay on employers judgeing employees on their attire

Nowadays, many employers judge an employee on their attire, while others believe that work performance should be evaluated.

Discuss both points of views and state your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

IELTS Essay on employers judging employees on their attire

Introduction

An old saying, “Do not judge a book by its cover”, is probably more applicable today than ever before.  Employers nowadays have seen to pay a lot of importance to employee attires rather than the performance of his or her work. In my opinion, this is misleading the employees and drifting them away from their work performance. Employers should evaluate the employee based on the task they are assigned in comparison to any other criteria.

Body Paragraph 1 on why employers should judge employees on their performance

The primary job for which the employer hires an employee is to deliver goals, complete targets while not compromising on the company’s values.  Let’s take the case of employee performance evaluation where an employee is assessed on skills such as leadership, communication, team player etc., not the physical appearance. Additionally, an employee’s attire may not be as appealing as others due to various reasons such as inexperience to corporate norms, poor financial condition, less access to resources etc. Sometimes, this misconception can hamper an organisation by demoralising employees leading to a high attrition rate.

Body Paragraph 2 on why employers should not judge employees on their appearance

On the other hand, some say attires do reflect an individual’s personality, and it is essential to have pleasant and appropriate dressing. Still, these are limitations of individual grooming, which can be taken care of quickly.  Some people believe that sectors like the hospitality industry are all about best dress up, but that’s not true. An Air Hostess is suited best for hospitality compared to other sectors but the essential qualities which set her apart are humbleness, smiling face, politeness and not her dressing sense.

End Paragraph 

In all, an individual’s performance and key skills required for a particular job outweigh the importance of dress up. Physical appearance may be absent due to multiple reasons and can be acquired. However, judging an employee by his clothes, not by their work, is an injustice and need to be understood by employers.

Review of IELTS Essay on employers judging employees on their attire

This is a unique sample as this was written by one of our students in the actual IELTS back in 2017. He scored eight bands on the IELTS Writing section. 

Strengths of the essay

  • The essay follows all the instructions. It discussed both the views given in the topic statement in detail and the supports the author’s opinion. 
  • The author sets up the discussion well in the introduction without repeating anything from the topic. Also, it clarifies what one should expect from the rest of the paragraphs.
  • Additionally, the two body paragraphs are well elaborated. The points are well developed with suitable examples that support the reasoning of the author. 
  • The end paragraph summarises the reasoning and reinstates the opinion of the writer. 
  • All the ideas are stitched together very well with the help of transition words.
  • Although the essay uses simple words so to say, the author manages to insert a quotation and unique words that are hardly repeated.

Weaknesses of the essay

  • One can hardly find any problems with the essay, but if one is forced to, then one could say that the author could have used more precise vocabulary. Also, the sentence structures used could be a bit clearer.

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