You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Discuss both points of views and state your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
We have been surrounded by a web of the internet which has been instrumental in recent progress of human society at an unprecedented pace. This growth has helped people get closer; making their relative positions almost invalid and turning this globe into a village. At the same time, it is evident from recent relationship patterns that more thought needs to be given to the implications of the development.
After the advent of e-mails and social networking, people all across the world came closer. Daughters settled in America started consulting their mothers for recipe each evening. Text and video chatting made this access even easier as not only the location but time constraint doesn’t matter now. Effects of internet transcend personal growth and affect professional life very prominently. Worldwide access has translated into fast, well informed and critically sound decisions which, has a significant impact on overall business size and model.
However, we never realised that ‘relationship building’ has transformed into ‘networking’ and spread of the relations became important than its depth. These shallow relations sucked out emotional bonding and gave undue importance to chasing a mirage of information. The day the human race became more curious about social media status than neighbours well-being was the day we seized to emphasise meaningful relations. As a result, the rise of internet re-habitation centre is seen.
Retrospection reveals that the internet is probably the most remarkable discovery since fire and wheel and its justified use can serve as a powerful unifying tool that this world ever needed. At the same time, its unconscious use may throw us into terrible darks of isolation. Hence, a balanced approach is advocated.
The essay has an appropriate introduction which specifies the overall scope of the essay. Moreover, ideas are sufficiently explained though more explanation could have been better. Furthermore, the examples are embedded well. Lastly, each paragraph has a well-defined purpose.
Paragraphs connected well with each other. However, the author could have used more linking words while joining sentences.
The words used in the essay aptly fit their intended purpose. Also, typical phrases are used appropriately.
All sentences are grammatically correct. Also, a sufficient number of complex and compound structures are used.