Why is this is the case?
What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?
Give reasons and examples from your knowledge or experience to support your answer.
Write at least 250 words.
In the past very few people were travelling; however, nowadays the number of travellers has increased. Observing this scenario, it is essential to analyze the causes for this trend and advantages for the person who travels.
The introduction tells the reader the scope of the essay. But the sentences are too simple for an opening.
There are multiple explanations for the rise in trend of travelling in the recent days. The improved means of transformation connect different corners of the world with better roads, increased airlines and metro trains. As a result, travelling among the countries and continents has become easy. Hence, today more people travel to different parts of the world than before. Secondly, attractive offers from travel agencies and credit cards for frequent travellers as an introductory discount while booking travel tickets make travelling affordable. Eventually, more people take vacation and travel to their place of interest.
The paragraph explains two reasons why people travel a lot nowadays. Both reasons are well developed, but they lack any example.
As a result, travelling to different locations is associated with advantages. To begin with, the traveller can become culturally aware as he opens his mind to the possibility of understanding different lifestyles and adopting them. Similarly, the struggles faced during the journey and in the destination faced during the trip and in the destination, such as harsh weather conditions, will improve his sustainability to any extreme climatic situations. One of my school friends who love travelling can mingle with people of any cultural background without hesitation. Additionally, travelling teaches about the world to the person who travels as he meets new people and learns different languages, making him independent.
The first few sentences of body paragraph 2 are awkward, although there are no grammatical errors. Those sentences could be written as follows.
As a result, travelling to different locations is advantageous. To begin with, the travellers are open to new experiences and hence learn about new cultures and even may adopt some good rituals as well.
In addition, the example used to short and doesn’t reflect the logic in the point mentioned earlier. Lastly, the last point repeats the ideas in the rest of the paragraph.
In summary, reduced travel fare and modernized transport system make people travel more than in the past. Not only people can become aware of cultural differences, but they can also learn new dialects and become physically fit to face rough weather conditions.
In the past century, people travelled only when it was necessary. However, nowadays, with the technological improvements in aviation and automobiles, people take up trips often. Looking at this trend, one must analyse the causes of the increase and its benefits.
The introduction paragraph explains the scope of the essay very well without repeating any words from the IELTS essay.
There are multiple reasons for an increasing number of travellers. Today, technology has ensured faster, reliable and safer modes of transport than ever before. So, people can expand their businesses in other countries or even plan to meet their relatives in far-off lands. As a result, one witnesses the increase in travelling. Eventually, such phenomenon has given rise to a robust travel and tourism industry which promotes people to travel and experience different cultures. For example, I had visited more than ten countries when I reached 30 years of age, whereas my father had not travelled to any other place by that age.
Body paragraph 1 explains a couple of reasons which are connected seamlessly. Also, the paragraph uses linking words very well.
Today’s ever-increasing travelling offers a lot of benefits to the tourists. When people visit a new country or place, they need someplace to stay and eat locally. As a result, the residents can avail business opportunities to provide such services to the visitors, giving a boost to the local economy. At the same time, when the locals mingle with the foreigners, both exchange their cultures and sympathise with each other, leading to harmony and peace within people of different countries. For instance, historically, European countries have allowed their citizens to travel throughout Europe. Consequently, over a few hundred years, they have strengthened their economies and lived harmoniously with each other.
Again there are two points, but both are interrelated with the help of logical connections and linking words. The points mention the advantages very thoroughly.
In conclusion, faster and safer means of transportation has fueled the recent surge in travelling across the world. Such a hike in the number of travellers around the globe has presented many economic benefits to the visitors and the natives.
Nowadays, people are more attracted toward enjoyment, rather than continuing with the same routine life. As a result, people love to travel to their favourite places and take a good break to refresh themselves.
Although the introduction is related to the main topic: travelling, at first glance, it seems loosely connected with the essay. Also, the introduction fails to inform the reader about the scope of the essay.
In today’s date, travelling from one place to another has become accessible and less expensive than before. Most of the people who love driving have their vehicle to travel to. For them, transportation is not a big issue. Today’s life is stressful, and many people want a break from routine. They want to spend quality time with their family as well. One more reason we can consider is the size of a family. Due to the nuclear family culture, travelling with them has become easier than before.
The author considers three points in the paragraph. However, all of them fail to explain convincingly why do people travel more nowadays. Also, the paragraph leaves an impression the author is more focused on travelling by individual cars only than all modes of transport. It is clear that the writer has not understood the essay topic clearly.
Travelling has many benefits to travellers. They can explore new places, their cultures, different kind of food. In all this process they tend to get knowledge about other people situated across the world. Also, people need peace of mind at some point in life. Travelling to your favourite place can help you get out of your tensions and live happily for a few days. It can be a push to a new start in your life. While travelling, you get any kinds of good and bad experiences simultaneously. Frequent travelling can prepare you to face difficulties while travelling. For example, if the tyre gets punctured in the middle of nowhere, it won’t be possible for you to change it and move ahead.
There are too many points which are not explained at all. Also, they are not connected. Such paragraphs and essays with many points but inadequate support would never fetch more than six bands as they don’t follow the instructions of IELTS writing task 2.
Looking back, travelling is a beautiful part of our life which we wish to happen again and again as it gives a push to start your routine again and knowledge as well which you get after exploring new parts of the world. Every person should take a break and travel the world. Happy travelling!
The end paragraph again fails to summarise the scope of the essay. It diverts from the main discussion in the essay.