Essay Sample on housing and accommodation

Following is IELTS sample related to housing and accommodation. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world.

What are some of the main factors that have contributed to this problem?

What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Essay

While travelling in my city Mumbai, it is hard to miss the cramped housing and ever-increasing slums. These issues creep in the cities because of multiple reasons and lead to lack of basic facilities.  The onus to provide accommodation and basic amenities lies on the government to a great extent.

Even after hundred years of industrialization, people from villages migrate to cities in search of better prospects of education and jobs. This rapid migration surges the demand of housing and property rates. Higher demand for housing leads to deficiency of the land while higher property rates push people to congested vicinities and hence the problems of housing. To illustrate, Pune, city in India witnesses people migrating people all over the country as the city has developed to be a manufacturing, IT and educational hub, giving ways to unstructured growth and accommodation woes. 

To overcome the obstacles of homeless, the government must take some instant steps. Firstly, the government must work on affordable housing schemes for citizen who have already found the means in the city. Let’s take case of Japan where the government is promoting ‘cubic feet living’, a concept which utilizes the vertical space. Secondly, it should promote the education as well as entrepreneurship in rural parts thereby reducing the current trend of migration and ultimately controlling the expanding cities.

Looking back, centralization of industrial area as well as means of education and career are major reasons for migration and thus accommodation despairs in cities. These difficulties can be addressed primarily by decentralization of industry as well career opportunities.

Review of IELTS Writing Task 2

Strengths

The writer has understood and the responded to the question in the format required. The essay makes for smooth reading as there are no awkward phrasings or misused words. There is a variety of sentence structures and connectors employed by the writer which shows their prowess in the language. The example provided with the point was appropriate as well. 

Weakness

The writer missed out on the purpose of the essay in the introductory paragraph. They may even be penalised for not writing multiple reasons as mentioned in the instructions. The points could have been a little more developed as well, instead of just stating it. 

Solution

Adding a statement like “This essay aims to explore the reasons for homelessness, and suggest a few solutions for the same” would have clearly stated the purpose of the essay. The writer would have benefitted from adding another point about homelessness apart from migration, say overpopulation and changing familial ties, to make sure they meet all the instructions. 

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