Write a letter to your Municipal Corporator.
In your letter, mention
Write at least 150 words. Do not write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
In the actual letter, you need not write a heading for each paragraph. They are written here so that you, as a student, can appreciate the structure in a better way.
Dear sir madam,
I am Niraj Deobhakar from Impasse Fleurie, Antibes, and I am writing this letter to voice my concerns regarding the city development plan of demolishing our local park.
Today, on a local podcast, I heard a builder excited about new development plans in our city that included building a 20 storey residential building on the local park in our area.
I was disappointed with the news as the garden in focus is the lungs of our locality. My fellow residents and I use it every morning for physical exercise. Also, many times, we take our families and children there on weekend picnics. Not to forget, the senior citizens gather there to run their laughter clubs every afternoon.
In case the city gives a green signal to building skyscrapers on these grounds, we all may miss an essential social part of our lives. Hence, I request you to shift this project to some other area.
I am sure you will consider my plea and take appropriate action. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you in advance.
The letter’s writer has developed each idea sufficiently, and more importantly, each idea is logically connected with the other. Additionally, linking devices are used at appropriate places. Although the author doesn’t try too hard to use hi-fi vocabulary, they aptly use sophisticated words and phrases.
Lastly, the letter could have had more variety of sentences, yet there are hardly any grammatical errors.
Dear sir madam,
I am Amit Shah writing this letter to inform you about the upcoming construction at Nehru park Pune.
I heard about this plan from my friend Rohan who works at the municipal corporation of our city. He told the builder to intend to build a 20 story building in 6 months at this park.
The park is lovely at present. Children from nearby areas like to play in this park in the evenings. Also, older people exercise and do yoga in the mornings. One can relax and rejuvenate at the park as the surroundings are very calm.
If the building is constructed at this place, then it will be harmful in many ways. I will be pleased if you protest against this development as it will lead to more pollution in a city.
I hope that you consider my suggestions. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you in advance.
The letter maintains the formal tone very well throughout. However, not each instruction is well explained. In my view, body paragraph 3 is insufficient. If the writer wants to state that the proposed building is harmful, they should support it with at least one example.
The author uses the linking devices wherever necessary. Yet, the sentences lack any variety. Lastly, it’s hard to find any grammatical errors.
Dear sir madam,
I am Ryan Grant living in the local area. I am writing this letter to raise my concerns regarding developing new buildings at an existing park in our locality.
On 22nd October, I read an article titled accommodations in one of the newspapers. It mentioned that the municipal corporation is planning to build a 22 storey building at the local park.
This park is the only green open space left in the area. Every morning people use it to exercise and walk. In fact, during summers it is full of students playing cricket or football. In the evenings, senior citizens gather together for a light walk ok and chit chat. Lastly, this garden is a collection of rare trees and an essential aspect of the social life of the local people.
I request you to kindly survey our locality to find out how many citizens support this decision. I am sure you will realise after the survey how critical this area is for all of us. Further, if you protest this development, we would be delighted.
I am hoping that you consider my opinion and take appropriate action. I am thanking you.
The author had a decent writing style since they maintained the formal tone of the letter in most of the paragraphs. Contrary to the previous letter, body paragraph 2 has too many ideas and seems unnecessary and repetitive. Also, linking words could have been more effective.
Although there are hardly any noticeable grammatical errors, most sentences lack any variety.