Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
Write at least 150 words.
The given bar chart illustrates the annual number of sales and rentals of movies from a certain store between 2002 and 2011.
Overall, there was a decline in the number of rentals and VHS sales whereas the sales of DVDs escalated for DVD. The Blu-ray sales which began in the year 2007 were the least overall.
In the beginning year, 2002, movie rentals were highest in number at 180,000 but they de-escalated steadily to reach approximately 60,000 in the year 2011. On the other hand, the number of DVD sales increased reaching the peak of more than 200,000 in 2007 followed by a slight downfall to reach 170,000 in the end.
Let’s discuss about the lesser popular ways of watching movies .VHS sales, which were above 80,000 in 2002, stopped after 2005. On the contrary, Blu-ray sales which began in the year 2007 with the opening of less than 10,000, managed to grow beyond 10,000 in the year 2011.
The report has a good opening and overview without copying much from the question statement itself. The overview paragraph summaries the trend well without giving exact numbers away.
The body paragraphs have well-defined purpose. They connect each other very well with linking devices. There are hardly any grammatical errors as well as the sentence structure have appropriate comparisons.
The given chart provides information about the number of rentals and sales of films per year. This data is collected between 2002 and 2011 and is compared among the four formats of sales and rentals.
Over ten years, the number of DVD sales per year is higher than the other sales and rentals. Individually, VHS sales and rentals showed a continuous decrease in their value, whereas the remaining formats increased.
Films had the highest number of rentals with around 185,000. Whereas, the DVD sales of films had a high number of approximately 45,000 being the lowest at the start of the given period. The number of film rentals showed a gradual decline ending up at 57,000 by 2011, while the DVD sales were flourishing at the end of the period with a number of 190,000.
Now, let’s discuss the VHS sales and Blu-ray sales of films. Firstly, the VHS sales had a value of nearly 80,000 and then with a continuous downfall till the year 2005 with a number of downfall till the year 2005 with a number of about 10,000. After 2005, the VHS sales demolished completely. On the other hand, the Blu-ray sales of films came with a negligible number of sales. However, its number kept on increasing and reached to around 15,000 by the end of the period.
Although this report’s overall structure is similar to the previous one, this report has a better introduction and overview.
Lack of clarity in sentence structures
Some of the sentence structures are unnecessarily complicated and make no sense. For example, consider the following sentence.
The VHS sales had a value of nearly 80,000 and then with a continuous downfall till the year 2005 with a number of downfall till the year 2005 with a number of about 10,000.
After reading this sentence, the reader must refer to the graph to understand what the author wishes to convey. However, it means the ideas of the author are not clear. So, the test-taker will lose bands even though they have understood the gist of the report.
Instead, consider the following sentence.
The VHS sales which were at around 80,000 units in 2002 fell consistently to reach 10,000 units in 2005. After that, no records of VHS sales are observed.
Although you may read two smaller sentences in the sentence above, anybody can understand what the author wants to say. The reader need not refer back to the chart or the graph.
This is just one example. Unfortunately, the whole report hard to understand thanks to emphasis on long-winded paragraphs.