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IELTS Report on book sales in a college bookshop

IELTS Report on book sales in a college bookshop

The table below summarises data of book sales by a college bookshop for February 2000. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words. 

 

Non-book club memebers

Book Club Members

Total

College Staff

College Students

Members of Public

Fiction

44

31

76

151

Non-fiction

29

194

122

942

1287

Magazines

332

1249

82

33

1696

Total

405

1474

204

1051

3134

6 band IELTS Report on book sales in a college bookshop

Introduction

The given table presents the data collected by a college bookshop during the second month of the year 2000. The given data is classified into book club members and non-book club members.

Overview

Overall, the magazine was demanded the most by the college students compared to the other categories, while fiction-based books were only among famous book club members and college staff. Also, the non-fiction books purchased by book club members were the highest, followed by college students.

Comments

The overview paragraph should effectively summarise the given data. In this section, the author introduces too many details among the categories. Such information may seem repetitive in the body paragraphs.

Body Paragraph 1

Firstly, fiction books were more preferred by the college staff who purchased 44 of them whereas only 31 college students bought fiction books. Further, fiction books seemed to be the favourites of the book club members, whereas the fiction sales were standing at 76. Secondly, combined sales of non-fiction books sold to the college staff, college students, and public members accounted for 345, which was for less than half the total non-fiction sales, summed up to be 1287, which were almost eight times more than that of next fiction sale. Furthermore, magazines were more common among college staff and students, standing at 332 and 1249 respectively. Nonetheless, 82 members contributed to the total sales of magazines, while only 33 book club members purchased magazines out of 1696. 

Comments

Body paragraph 1 has no clear theme of the distribution of data. I always advise students to have a specific theme for each body paragraph. You can read a better version below.

The introductory statement is missing in the paragraph. It helps the reader to know what to expect in the rest of the paragraph. 

The following sentence structure is confusing as it has too many comparisons.

College students and public members accounted for 345, which was for less than half the total non-fiction sales total summed up to be 1287, almost eight times more than that of the next fiction sale.

Body Paragraph 2

Although the net sales of college staff were less than that of the college students by 1069, it exceeded the total sale of public members, initially 204, by 201. Nevertheless, 1051 book club members contributed to the net sales of all, which was calculated to be 3134. 

Comments

Although the net sales of college staff were less than that of the college students…

The above statement implies that college staff and students were sold. On the other hand, in reality, they were buying books. Such sentences structures are grammatically correct, but their meaning is incorrect.

7.5 band IELTS Report on book sales in a college bookshop

Introduction

The given table shows the books purchased by people at a book shop in the second month of the year 2000. This data is distributed into two main groups of people and three types of books. 

Overview

Overall, while magazines were the most popular among the readers, fiction books were the least preferred. At the same time, among all readers, college students who were part not part of the book club were the most active, whereas the members of the public were least interested in reading. 

Body Paragraph 1 on non-book club members

Let’s analyse readers who were not part of the book club. Among all, college students purchased 1249 magazines but bought hardly fiction or non-fiction books in comparison.  A similar trend was seen among college staff who purchased about 332 magazines compared to 44 fiction and 29 nonfiction books. Lastly, the members of the public read about 122 books non-fiction books, whereas they bought only 82 magazines, a trend contrary to that among the rest of the groups.

Body Paragraph 2 on book club members

Similar to the members of the public who were not in the book club, the book club members overwhelmingly preferred non-fiction books (942) rather than any other category. They read hardly 76 fictions and 33 magazines. 

Comments

  • The overview doesn’t get into the nitty-gritty of the data and offers a summary of the table very well.
  • The body paragraph 1 has a clear agenda about describing non-book club members only in the paragraph. The paragraph also compares the behaviour among the sub-groups of non-book club members.
  • The body paragraph 2 compares the book club members with the previous group, and relevant comparisons are made within the paragraph as well.

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