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IELTS report on charity by British people

IELTS Report on charity by the British people

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Report

The given line graph provides information about the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range. This data is collected for the years 1990 & 2010 and is compared among 5 different age groups. 

Overall, in both these years, it can be observed that, people between 36 to 50 gave more money than other age groups in 1990 & in 2010 the age group of 51 to 65 did charity in higher amount amongst all age groups, while in the youngest age group i.e. 18 to 25 is showing least amount of charity. As shown in the graph, the percentage of charity decreased between all age groups except “51 to 65” and “65 above” age groups in the mentioned years.  

As shown in the graph, people between 51 to 65 age group’s charity is growing and has shown 3% increment in the last year as compared to 1st year. The age group of 65 above people’s charity saw rise by 2%  in the last year than the previous stated year. 

As presented in the graph, amongst 3 age groups the amount of charity is decreasing in the last year as compared to the 1st year. The age group 18 to 25’s charity amount dropped by 7% in last year which is more than the half from 1st year; in next group i.e. 26 to 35 it decreased by 6% in the last year & in the third mentioned age group in the chart i.e. 36 to 50 it declined by 7% as compared to 1st year. 

Review

Total Band: 06

Strengths of the writer:

The writer appropriately summarizes all the data provided, and combines data points to come up with their own comparisons not directly mentioned in the data given. This allows them to have a more aerial view of the data. 

Weaknesses of the writer and solutions

IELTS does not allow the use of shorthand as such ‘&’ and ‘i.e.’, so students must be prudent and use the full forms instead. The numbers mentioned in the report could be presented in word form for more brownie points. Some awkward phrasings that affected meaning, and therefore the score, also include: 

“people between 36 to 50 gave more money…”

The examiner expects you to write a report which independently can explain the data. They need not refer to the diagram when reading your report. Not mentioning ‘36 to 50’ of what causes confusion in the examiner and does not make for smooth reading, affecting marks. The writer could have instead said, “people between 36 to 50 years of age gave more money…”

Word precision is also an opportunity for improvement for this writer as they write words that are approximate for what they want to say. For example: 

“age group of 51 to 65 did charity in higher amount amongst all age groups…”

They could have framed the same sentence as “age group of 51 to 65 did the most amount of charity amongst all age groups…” since they are talking about the biggest group, instead of one of the bigger groups. 

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