Following is a sample report on water usage worldwide. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The given line graph provides information about changes in global water use by sector from 1900 to 2000. The table gives details about the water consumption in Brazil and Congo in 2000.
Overall, the agriculture sector consumed largest quantity of water while the domestic sector consumed the lowest. Initially, domestic and industrial use of water showed a stable trend and increased towards the end while the use of water in agriculture increased throughout till the end of the given period. On the other hand, water consumption was higher in Brazil than Congo.
Among the two countries, Brazil had much higher population which was 176 million, almost 33 times higher than the population of Congo. As a result, the consumption of water per person in Brazil was higher (359m3) than Congo which was only 8m3. Moreover, Congo had only 100 km2 of irrigated land, 250 times less than that of Brazil.
Agriculture was the highest consumer of water in contrast to the other two sectors. In 1900, the quantity water used by this sector was about 500 km3 which increased every year and finally was six times more than its initial value by the end of the given period. On the contrary, the quantity of water utilised for industrial and domestic purposes had a similar pattern. In 1900, the use of water by industries was about 100m3 and was stable around this value till the year 1950 after which it displayed an upward trend. Ultimately, it was about ten times more than its original value in 2000. Same is the case with domestic use of water though it was consistent till the year 1960 and increased thereafter thus reaching to 300 m3 in 2000.
The writer has flawlessly met all the criteria in the instruction. Stellar analysis of the data provided, with numbers not mentioned in the passage at all. Simply exemplary!
The only two slips which caused this score to be near-perfect is some missing context and an awkward use of a connector. In the overview paragraph, the writer states “On the other hand, water consumption was higher in Brazil than Congo.” The placing of the sentence required the sentence to be completed with a little more context about its origin, such as “… in the table given.” Since the writer was describing a data point in another graph altogether, this abrupt change caused a hindrance in the otherwise smooth read.
In Body Paragraph 2, the use of the phrase “on the contrary” was rather awkward, since the phrase is used when discrediting the initial claim, instead of comparing two facts or data points. The writer would have benefitted from using the word “conversely” instead for better word precision.