Letter Conveying Displeasure With A Hostel Accommodation

Letter conveying displeasure

You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.

Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,

  • say what the problem is
  • describe the accommodation you thought you were getting
  • ask the provider to solve the problem

Write at least 150 words. 

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Sample Letter Conveying Displeasure with the Accommodation

Dear Mr. Thompson,

My name is Sachin Patil, and I am taking an eight-week intensive Statistics course at London School of Economics. I am writing this letter to convey my displeasure with the accommodation.

My university is paying for my tuition, and I am using my summer vacation to study here. While my room in Phoenix Hostel on campus is pleasant and the facilities are very good, the hostel is extremely noisy. Since I am on scholarship, it is rather important to me that I am able to study in the best environment.

When I organised my accommodation, I was assured I would be staying only with post-graduate or intensive-course students. However, most of the people in this hostel are attending summer-school courses after high school. It seems to me they are enjoying one long party: certainly no one observes light out or turns down music despite being asked to.

I wonder if I may be moved to a hostel which is more conducive to serious study. I am sure your cooperation can help me justify the bursary.

Awaiting your response. Thank you for your kind attention.

Yours sincerely,
Sachin Patil

Review

Overall Band: 8

Strengths of the writer

The writer adequately responds to the instructions given, touching upon and developing all the points made for clear communication. The tone of the letter is very appropriate for the circumstances mentioned. There were no awkward sentences or grammatical errors. This is a great example of using simple sentence structures and still achieving a great band. The writer’s vocabulary is commendable as they use uncommon words, like ‘bursary’ (meaning a grant awarded to someone to enable them to study in university) suggesting that they have studied the language extensively. 

Weaknesses of the writer and Solutions

The writer could have benefited from using a few idioms and phrases to show language prowess. A phrase like ‘create ruckus’ would have fit very well with the subject of this letter, as would have ‘wake the dead’, to depict just how loud the fellow hostelers could be. 

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