Sample Essay on Car Ownership And Traffic

Following is a sample essay on car ownership and traffic.

You should spend about 40 minutes on the task.

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’

How true do you think this statement is?

What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Sample Essay on car ownership and increased traffic

Introduction

In the past, having a car was a sign of privilege and luxury, so there were not so many cars on the road. However in today’s time a car has become more of a necessity, and almost everyone seems to own one, creating a massive traffic problem across the globe. Given this trend it is essential to understand whether car ownership is the reason behind huge traffic jams, and what the government can do to discourage the use of so many private vehicles on the road. 

Body Paragraph 1

Let us first discuss whether rise in car ownership has affected traffic jams. Over last 30 years, families have been buying multiple cars because they can afford it. If only one person travels to a particular destination in a car, the amount of cars on the road has to skyrocket. For instance, in a family of three adults, there would be three cars travelling to different destinations in the morning causing traffic in different parts of the city. On the other hand, it is not just about the car ownership, but also the exponential rise in population over 30 years. There are more people in the planet trying to reach office every day, so everyone has to spend more time travelling. 

Body Paragraph 2

It is important to contemplate solutions for this problem. Firstly, the government must make cabs cheaper. Cabs are the closest replacement to having a private vehicle. Therefore, subsiding cab travel will make people pick public transport more because of the cost and convenience. Secondly, the government should increase the frequency of buses and trains. That way people have more comfortable travel, and do not have to waste too much time waiting for their ride to arrive. Focusing on making public transport more convenient is the only way to curb private vehicles on the road. 

End Paragraph

To summarise, not only has the world seen a rise in population, but those people can also afford to buy more cars than ever, causing massive traffic jams on the road. Making cabs cheaper, and working towards making other public transport more convenient is the only way for the government to discourage private vehicles without introducing new laws. 

Review of Writing Task 2

Overall score: 7.5

Strengths

The writer has understood the scope of the essay and does not move away from the topic at point. The conclusion is very well written and summarises the whole write-up precisely. The writer uses linking devices aptly and also maintains proper sentence structure. The writer also uses variety of sentence structures (simple, compound and complex) without any grammatical errors.

Weakness

The examples which the writer gives are vague and need to be more specific. Underdeveloped examples at some places may affect the otherwise perfect writing. 

For example, “Firstly, the government must make cabs cheaper. Cabs are the closest replacement to having a private vehicle. Therefore, subsiding cab travel will make people pick public transport more because of the cost and convenience.”

Solution

Firstly, the government must make cabs cheaper as they are the closest replacement to having a private vehicle. By doing so, the number of private vehicles on the road will decrease and commuters will be encouraged to opt for carpooling.

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One Response

  1. The rate of buying new cars is increasing at such a high speed, that will become a serious issue in many cities around the world. There are many cities which are facing problems of frequent traffic jams and huge increase of traffic on roads at peak hours. Government must look into the increasing number of car ownership to tackle this issue.

    I quite agree to the statement while returning from work to home I see more number of cars every day. So many times there are traffic jams which are also increasing day by day. The car ownership has tremendous growth because, the middle-class man wants to live luxurious life and travel together with his family. To have a car also increases the status of living in the society. To counter this, government should levy some taxes on having a car, to save this extra added tax people might not buy a car.

    Many car manufacturing companies are introducing budget cars to target lower income people to buy a car. Also many banks provide a car loans on such low interests. This results in growing the number of car owners. The government should tell banks to raise the interest rates and also promotes the usage of public transport. Many people don’t use buses or trains due to lack of cleanliness and the damaged condition of public transports. Municipal corporation or transport authority perform fitness check and ensure proper maintenance of public transport vehicles. The frequency of local transport also be increased in high traffic area this will help to reduce the traffic-jam.

    I believe if the government takes these measures promptly this will surely reduce the rising number of car ownership. It will help many cities by reduce in number of traffic jams.

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